So I retook "Marry Me" with the idea of putting the "Yes" in the slot holder instead of on the board. I took some with seven letters and some with just these three. The angle and lighting was the best for this picture, though I'm still not very satisfied with it. I started too late and it was already getting dark outside when I tried taking this picture (Yes, I was playing scrabble outside, by myself, in the dark.
) Anyway... I do like it all the same. The way I took it I was trying to blur either to the "Yes" or the "Will you marry me" and have the other clear. I liked this angle and focus the best.
EDIT: Hoping to do this for For
's Re-envision it! project.
When taking this picture I struggled between wanting to have a correct scrabble game (which would basically mean that I couldn't have a space and have the words "Will You" together) and wanting it to be easily read. This was the best solution that I came up with, though by all means I am open to suggestions.
Also, what about the angle? Is straight on really the most interesting way I could have taken that or is there a better way that I just happen to be missing? And if it IS best straight on, is it important that the picture be precisely centered?
Next, the letter holder. I like it being in the picture, although I also tried it a different way with this picture originally:
Is one way better than the other? Personally I found this one a bit more interesting because the focus was more dramatic, rather than the whole thing being in focus, but I dunno... With the letter holder I also felt like there should be seven letters but I wasn't sure how exactly to go about doing that. I could put nonesense letters around the "yes" but I tried that some and it seemed jumbled to me, less clear and less dramatic. Anyone think it would be better that way?
Lastly, would this picture be more dramatic with a traditional scrabble board (wooden pieces, muted colors, etc.) or is it better with the more vibrant, new looking pieces?
Thanks to anyone who takes the time to critique this!
~Secret
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Sta.sh
It would be a great idea to doing
The "yes" is a fast, as the couple already had planned, or no one would doubt to say YES.
It reminds me of the movies on las vegas. The life as a player plays with a beautiful woman he loves.
Innovative idea and lovely, men should not be afraid to do this things please! the women loves this things!!!!!!!!!!!
I love your idea! please keep your good imagination
First of all, I love the idea. It's quite lovely, and I think the diamonds make the perfect spaces to be honest. I see what you were saying with spaced or put together, but this works perfectly.
Also, it shows breaking rules or boundaries, which could work well with the concept as well.
I do like this one better than the original one you did. In the original, yes was just laid out there, while this one, still holds the answer to the question. In the game, nobody would know what was had yet. So I think this one holds a bit more anticipation.
Which leads to your question about the jumbled letters. In a way I want to say yes and I want to say no at the same time. I like that the YES is clear, but it seems incomplete without the other four letters.
Maybe if you put them off to the side and spaced away from the yes, something to fill space but not take notice, perhaps it'd give a complete feel. I think that's one where you'd have to take a few shots and see what comes out.
If you did decide to do that, I think maybe if two of the other letters were N and O (but not placed right next to each other), it could give an anticipating feel for those that do actually notice it. Like, the answer could go either way, even though you'd see that clearly, it's going one direction, and that is yes.
You asked about the classic scrabble. In a sense, I do like the brighter colors of this piece. It adds a more dynamic and vivid sort of feel to the questions, but at the same time 'will you marry me?' isn't exactly a new phrase or anything, I think the classic-ness of it would be nice as well at the same time. I think both could be interesting, and to be honest, I think I'd have to see the other to decide which one I actually like more.
As for the angle, I do like it, but at the same time, maybe if you lifted your camera up to angle it down a little bit more, so you could see the space between you and yes. Or just pulled the letter holder away a little bit, whichever, would give the same effect I think.
I do think though, for the angle, maybe if you titled it a little to the right, it seems a bit tilted to me. It's mostly from the red squares going diagonally across the board. Also, you can see where the top ends on the upper left corner. Though this isn't exactly distracting from the photo much, it is there, so I figured I could point that out just a little bit. This is more personal taste than the actual photo itself. Also, the letter holder on the bottom, is cut off, I think if you're going to have it so close, if it could go across the whole picture or be centered in the picture, it'd be more symmetric to the viewer.
As for the letters being more centered, I don't think it'd really give anything to the photo. I think to be honest, I like it the framing the way it is.
With the length of the words, The 'y' for the meeting of the words works nicely and seems quite balanced since the longer part is on the left and there's a bit more space on the right.
Over all; great work
TORi
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